Jacob McDonough
College Writing 1 @ 9:00
Dr. Kyburz
17 October 2017
Patience is a Virtue
I am a flawed human being. We all are. One of my bigger faults is patience.
Every morning when I wake up, I have to wake my brother up too. It takes two seconds as I walk out of the room to say, “Hey Anthony! Get up.” Yet it is one of the most bothersome tasks of my day. I come out of my room and make breakfast. It takes so long. Then I’m out the door to school.
I drive myself most days.s. I cannot stand driving. When I am supposed to 45 I go 55. Why can’t I slow down just a bit. What’s the rush?
I’m a clock watcher. You know that kid who always knows exactly how much time is left until the class ends. That’s me. Lunch is even worse. I go to the den a couple of times a week. I do not have a good relationship with the vibrating notification thing, that tells you when your food is done. We hate each other, and once he finally brings me good news, I leave him in the dust.
I work a lot even though I am in school. My job is not very good about keeping us off our phones. I listen to music the whole time. Its part of how I count down. Approximately thirteen songs and hour, including commercials 65 songs a shift. Then I drive home, five miles an hour over the speed limit, and that is on a good day.
Finally, I cannot wait to crash. Dinner, shower, final texts to friends, and I am out like a light. The process repeats.
However, I ask myself, “What are you so eager to do, that makes everything you do everyday so unimportant.” It is probably a question most of us can ask ourselves. What is so important on our schedule that causes us to rush through everything we do. Maybe, if I choose one thing a day to do slowly, methodically, and patiently, I can curb the habit. Then again, I would probably rush through everything else all the more to make up for lost time.
Jacob, I think your microtheme is very meaningful and has a lot of potential. However, there are a couple things you can fix easily. For example, take out "I" after the first paragraph, fix up grammar and spelling here and there and I think you will do pretty well!
ReplyDeleteYes. I agree with Ashna. Nicely said :)
DeleteJacob,
ReplyDeleteI like your microtheme a lot! Maybe too many "I"s like Ashna said already but I am a fan of the content. I know the feeling of rushing through everything without any sense and purpose. Try to be more aware of what you have in life and enjoy for example having the love of a brother and the opportunity to g to school!
I think it is very well written. It seems very personal and doesn't really shift over to "public". I think you have a very good idea since many people can relate to it, especially students.
ReplyDeleteYes. Listen to Nico. I like what you're exploring, but try to move beyond your concerns exclusively, so that you get us involved in a problem that is shared, that might make us all think. Keep going!
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